Basic Instructions ([info]basic_inst) wrote,
@ 2007-08-24 09:06:00
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More Daily Tests
So, after last week the general consensus was that breaking up a single strip into four daily strips didn't work. Scott A. suggested two more things to try.

1. That I try one more time to fit my full four panel comics within a daily strip footprint.
And
2. That I try to actually produce one strip a day for awhile, just to see how that flows.

I was dubious of both ideas, but I swore to myself at the start of this project that I would keep an open mind.

I tried one, "How to answer the unanswerable" and it looked like legal fine print with some tiny drawings thrown in. Looking at it, it did occur to me that I wasn't entirely happy with the 3rd panel's joke anyway, so I cut it. The result is below.


Adams and I quickly agreed that this "Write four panels and drop the weakest" plan was worth exploring. Below are the next two day's comics.


 
Any comments? I'd welcome your opinions.



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(Anonymous)
2007-08-26 01:55 pm UTC (link)
In my humble, non-expert opinion.

The way I see the humour working is that you describe a situation, and then visualise it into a single panel. I like that a lot: the two complement eachother perfectly. However, it also "crowds" each panel because it is something on its own.

I'm not sure how this can be helped--or even if it should--but I'm afraid the format you use (both visual format as delivery) does not lend to small panels. Strips like Dilbert and Garfield have a lot of empty space in each panel, lightening for casual read.

You can make something different that's also good (you _have_ comical talent), but I doubt you can take BI and "cram" it into three panels without changing it radically. It's not the same, but it's still good.

Just my two cents, :)
Tarbo

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